OTS: The Sci-Fi Channel Has Funny Shows

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OTS: The Sci-Fi Channel Has Funny Shows; ^^
Topic Started: Aug 2 2006, 02:59 AM (427 Views)
synth	Aug 2 2006, 02:59 AM Post #1
MT's ONLY JENNIFER Posts: 814 Group: Members Member #46 Joined: July 26, 2006	completely on the spot, in fact I wrote it in this very new-topic box, hope you enjoy. I know I owe two of you major crits and I'll get to them ASAP. cheers. OTS: The Sci-Fi Channel Has Funny Shows May is dead. “I have no birth?” May is dead. “Then what of my children?” Your children will turn to midnight gusts. “Why?” To get… [The maypole’s cry in streamer circles Twisting like sweaty feet in starched sheets, and They wail rich parsley-breath over the meadow night Brightened by the flaming zephyr coming from the willows.] Because May is dead. “I have no birth?” Because May is dead. “Then what of my children?” Your children will unravel to murky crescents. “Why?” To get… [And my face drifts out of the mirror’s reflection, weeping: “I’m lost in a puddle; dank, broken, and bruised, with Sea salt for skin and stalks as brittle bones.” And I wail rich parsley-green over the meadow night Brightened by the flaming zephyr coming from the willows.] “May is not dead.” “May is not dead.” “May is not dead.” “May is not dead.” “My children are dead.” Why? “Because…” Why? “Because I killed them” Why? “Why?” To get… “To get… forgotten, tossed away from the burning month of May.” [The coil breeze dies to ash]
	-Homosexual Jennifer.


Morgan	Aug 2 2006, 08:50 AM Post #2
Dinkin' flicka. Posts: 1,890 Group: Staff Member #2 Joined: June 28, 2006 Gender: Male Name: Morgan Location: Sarasota, FL Last.fm: rockon1824	First of all, I love your titles. This piece is amazing. I love how it's kind of written like a play. There's absolutely nothing wrong with it. I'm in awe. :o
	If If you If you could If you could only If you could only stop If you could only stop your If you could only stop your heart If you could only stop your heart beat If you could only stop your heart beat for If you could only stop your heart beat for one heart If you could only stop your heart beat for one heart beat.


Ninja Kitten	Aug 2 2006, 09:10 AM Post #3
01011011 01100100 01110110 01011101 Posts: 1,529 Group: Members Member #9 Joined: June 28, 2006	Yea, I agree. I would give it a full crit but I love it as is! Great job man
	clicky?


synth	Aug 3 2006, 09:43 PM Post #4
MT's ONLY JENNIFER Posts: 814 Group: Members Member #46 Joined: July 26, 2006	wow, I positivity, thanks guys I really didnt know how this would go over, I'll get to yours soon, thanks again! -synth :boobs:
	-Homosexual Jennifer.


ana	Aug 25 2006, 10:11 PM Post #5
eskizo Posts: 5,763 Group: Staff Member #27 Joined: June 29, 2006 Gender: Female Name: Ana Location: Madrid	dylan... ... ... i hate you hell, this is one of those pieces that makes me wanna quit writing, you're too freaking good... you have an amazingly good style, and obviously there's nothing i can say about this piece except that i damn like it, so i'm just bumping the thread to let you know that i hate you and i'll someday steal your inspiration. j/k, great job.
	I'M SPAINISH! *I DOSENT SPLEL WEL!*


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